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Remark 1:
For technical clarity to your readers, please consider revising the highlighted sentence to “This law…conversion of the energies of the baryons and leptons…into entropy.”

Explanations

	[Explanation1]: Singular/Plural: Since the subject here is plural (black holes), its corresponding pronoun should also be plural.
	[Explanation2]: Word choice: In academic writing, information is presented with accuracy and conciseness. Formal language is a hallmark of academic English. One way to ensure conciseness in expression is converting phrasal verbs to formal words.
	[Explanation3]: Article usage: Use of an article for correct grammatical expression
	[Explanation4]: Language enhancement: Revision made for enhanced flow and transition
	[Explanation6]: Subject-specific revision: Sentence transition and clarity have been improved according to the technical context.
	[Explanation7]: Article usage: Since a specific “matter” is being referred to here, the definite article "the" is required.
	[Explanation8]: Subject-specific revision: An alternative sentence has been recommended to the author.
	[Explanation9]: Typographical error: This spelling has been corrected.

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Remark 1:
For technical clarity to your readers, please consider revising the highlighted sentence to “This law…conversion of the baryonic and leptonic energies…into entropy.”

Explanations

	[Explanation1]: Language correctness: Readability—Joining two sentences to avoid redundancy and enhance readability.
	[Explanation2]: Language enhancement: Readability—Use of a pronoun to avoid repetition.
	[Explanation3]: Technical word choice: In this context, “concentration” is a better technical word choice to be used.
	[Explanation4]: Adverb placement: In the passive voice, adverbs of manner are generally placed between the helping and main verbs.
	[Explanation5]: Academic word choice: In academic writing, information is presented with accuracy and conciseness. Formal language is a hallmark of academic English. One way to ensure conciseness in expression is converting phrasal verbs to formal words.
	[Explanation6]:Subject-specific revision: Sentence transition and clarity have been improved according to the technical context.
	[Explanation7]:Subject-specific revision: An alternative concise sentence has been recommended to the author.
	[Explanation8]: Sentence clarity: This change has been made to prevent ambiguity between the statements of facts and the experiments conducted in this study.
	[Explanation9]: Style: In American English, that is used to introduce a restrictive clause and which a nonrestrictive clause. Here we have changed that to which as this clause is non-restrictive.

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